Strange Shapes

11 Oct

I’m still getting a fair amount of shorties that come in odd packages. I’ve written a lot of stories in different narrative forms (e.g., cosmetic package instructions, a brochure), so I don’t mean that. I mean that once I got into my third month of shorties, I started getting these little globs of story that feel complete but don’t have an obvious story arc. Today’s shorty is one of these and it ends with a kind of word-tic that I would never have tried if I weren’t pushed to extremes by this project. But why not??

Working Title: She Was There
1st Sentence: When I was maybe ten years old and happened to be lying in bed one afternoon, sick—not fearfully sick, just feeling rotten and limp at the bottom of some virus—I felt the bed dip, half-way down and to the right, just where my mother might sink into the mattress to ask how I was feeling, if there was anything she could do to help, did I think I might be able to eat something?
Favorite Sentence: It had felt so real that I’d imagined, even, a presence, felt the static of another person, heard her breath.
Word Length: 580

Image by RaviC, modified.

2 Responses to “Strange Shapes”

  1. cynthia October 12, 2012 at 8:45 PM #

    Both sentences good in this one!

    • Claire Guyton October 16, 2012 at 8:35 PM #

      So funny, Cyn, you tend to like sentences I worry have no appeal. Makes me feel better, thank you!

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